06 July 2014

writing tips | "..., respectively"

[to my students]
Avoid using the word “respectively”.
Avoid giving long lists of things that makes the reader backtrack into the sentence too connect topics and numbers.

Avoid:
The specific discharge capacities of the proton batteries using PS and PS40PA electrolytes increased from 1.2 to 3.6 mAh g-1 at the discharge currents of 10.0 mA, respectively, for both proton batteries increased.

Instead try this:
The specific discharge capacities of the proton batteries using PS (1.2 mAh g-1) and PS40PA electrolytes (3.6 mAh g-1) increased as the discharge currents (10.0 mA) for both proton batteries increased.





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